Comments on: memory foam http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/ Tue, 16 Feb 2010 14:13:35 -0600 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: Maureen http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-1551 Maureen Thu, 26 Mar 2009 19:25:09 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-1551 Just a hint of regret, and alot of kindness, connection in these words. I love the last lines: I have chose sleep/ traded sonic booms/ for silence/ but I have not forsaken you/ as long as my skin remembers/where you fit. I like that the phrase "for silence" is on it's own line, as if sleeping on it's own bed, on the other side of a door, a wall. The metaphors you use (blue angels, sound barrier, lumberjacks, jackhammers, beating your chest) are all so full of energy and action -- the perfect counterpoint for dreaming about a good night's sleep. I'm lucky my husband falls asleep before me. I snore. :-D Just a hint of regret, and alot of kindness, connection in these words. I love the last lines:
I have chose sleep/ traded sonic booms/ for silence/ but I have not forsaken you/ as long as my skin remembers/where you fit.

I like that the phrase “for silence” is on it’s own line, as if sleeping on it’s own bed, on the other side of a door, a wall.

The metaphors you use (blue angels, sound barrier, lumberjacks, jackhammers, beating your chest) are all so full of energy and action — the perfect counterpoint for dreaming about a good night’s sleep.

I’m lucky my husband falls asleep before me. I snore. :-D

]]> By: dale http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-105 dale Tue, 09 Sep 2008 21:04:22 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-105 Heh. Yeah. Heh. Yeah.

]]> By: leslee http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-98 leslee Sun, 07 Sep 2008 01:57:50 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-98 Heh. Talk about making poetry out of a bad situation! Heh. Talk about making poetry out of a bad situation!

]]> By: christine http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-97 christine Sun, 07 Sep 2008 00:53:59 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-97 There's nothing like pink foam earplugs. I could sleep through a whole forest being felled. Great photo of a wiped-out tired lady. There’s nothing like pink foam earplugs. I could sleep through a whole forest being felled. Great photo of a wiped-out tired lady.

]]> By: Nathan http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-99 Nathan Sat, 06 Sep 2008 10:05:17 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-99 This great -- from the colors to the title to the poem's rhythm and repetition. This great — from the colors to the title to the poem’s rhythm and repetition.

]]> By: Cory http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-101 Cory Fri, 05 Sep 2008 22:50:55 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-101 Very well composed. Leslie really invites her audience in, doesn't she? Great work. Very well composed. Leslie really invites her audience in, doesn’t she? Great work.

]]> By: johemmant http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-100 johemmant Fri, 05 Sep 2008 21:50:27 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-100 This is very good. In my house everyone snores.....husband and two very young sons. This is very good. In my house everyone snores…..husband and two very young sons.

]]> By: Giggles http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-104 Giggles Fri, 05 Sep 2008 19:23:28 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-104 Really well done!! Really well done!!

]]> By: Gail Dragon http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-103 Gail Dragon Fri, 05 Sep 2008 16:06:12 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-103 I sure like it too. I take it your honey is a snorer. Mine too. I sure like it too.

I take it your honey is a snorer. Mine too.

]]> By: Leslie F. Miller http://postalpoetry.org/2008/09/05/memory-foam/comment-page-1/#comment-102 Leslie F. Miller Fri, 05 Sep 2008 15:31:03 +0000 http://www.postalpoetry.org/?p=152#comment-102 Well, <i>I</i> sure like it! Well, I sure like it!

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